I got my line editor reviews back today for The Present. Unlike the initial reviews the total changes were: One sentence! No deletions and no changes! Yay!!!!!! My initial editor (she knows who she is) is awesome! Release 1/8/16!
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An Excerpt From: THE PRESENT
Copyright © PATRICK KHAYLER, 2015
“Becky helped me pick out your anniversary present today,” Lisa said, looking over at Becky with a smirk. “She even helped me wrap it.”
Davis looked back to Becky, intrigued. The light from the windows behind her shone through her skirt, highlighting the space between her legs without actually showing anything. As he stared, a small patch of redness snuck upon both her cheeks. Unable to hold her gaze any longer, he looked back at Lisa, hoping his eyes hadn’t lingered for an inappropriate length of time.
“After all her hard work, I figured taking her to dinner was the least we could do.” Lisa opened the bottle of wine. “Besides…” She loosed a bewitching smile as she filled two glasses. “I was hoping you would want her to see you unwrap it.”
Davis was getting more confused by the minute.”Uhm… I guess that depends on what it is.” He smiled uneasily, knowing the type of presents Lisa had given him in private before. His cock decided to rise rapidly. He shifted closer to the back of the couch, hoping Becky wouldn’t see the swelling in his pants.
“Are you okay?” Lisa asked as she walked past him and into the living room with the two glasses. She handed one to Becky and turned back to face him. She took a small sip from her glass as a wicked grin climbed her face. “You look a little…uncomfortable.”
The two women’s eyes bored into him. His face was on fire. He hoped he wasn’t blushing too badly. He decided to play it off. “Well.” He tried and mostly succeeded at a smile. “When you have two gorgeous, scantily clad women in your living room, something is bound to come up.”
The women giggled at his quip. Their reactions more arousing than embarrassing.
What the hell did they talk about today?
“Well, stop gawking and go get ready,” Lisa commanded. “The sooner we eat dinner, the sooner you can unwrap your gift.” She looked at Becky before they both looked down and giggled again. “I want to give you time to enjoy your dessert…one delicious lick at a time.”
Now Davis was sure he was being excluded from something but he had no idea what it was. He only knew he couldn’t get any harder. He wanted to roll Lisa’s dress up her thighs so badly he couldn’t stand it. Dinner was going to be an eternity. He was going to be rock solid for hours.
“Your wish is my command.” He pretended to tip a nonexistent hat as his cock strained painfully. “Are you sure you won’t join me?” he jested.
Lisa didn’t miss a beat. “Who?” She smiled with mock confusion, switching her gaze from Davis to Becky and back again. “Don’t pretend I didn’t see your eyes burning through her dress.” Her jealousy was all feigned.
“Uhmm…” Again, he had been taken totally by surprise. “That would be you, my love.” His voice cracked as the words barely squeaked free.
“No way,” Lisa quipped. “I’m not going to let you mess up all my hard work.” She snickered, looking at Becky. “I’m not going to let you mess up Becky’s hard work either.” Her eyes lit on Davis’s face again.
Becky put her forehead on Lisa’s shoulder and giggled again.
Davis couldn’t believe what Lisa was saying in front of a stranger. He was dumbstruck. Dumbstruck with a cock that was ready to explode in his pants. “Okaaay…”He drew out the word slowly. “I’ll go get ready.”
“Hurry back,” Becky called sweetly.
Release is set! January 8, 2016
I can’t believe it! After more than a hundred hours of edits, The Present has finally been moved to Final Edits! I have learned so much about writing and the book is so much better because of my editors hard work. I don’t know the etiquette in this manner (I respect her privacy) so I can’t give her name but I would shout it from the rooftops if I could.
Ellora’s Cave (ellorascave.com) has recently contracted my first novel for publication. The Present is a contemporary Erotic Romance about the possible and hopefully, the probable. There are no secret plots, no spies, no shootings and no time travel. Although I wrote The Present as an unconventional love story about a married couple, I wanted it to be a work that every reader could relate to regardless of sex, favorite genre or marital status. I wanted to create tale of love wrapped around fantasy fulfillment, sexual desires and untapped lust. A love story that suggests every fantasy you will ever have could be as close as a single conversation with your significant other.
The Present was originally written as a short story for my wife’s birthday. I don’t know who I was more nervous about showing it to first: My wife or Ellora’s cave. I was pretty stressed out about both but, I think giving it to my wife was the most difficult. When you create something from your heart and then show it to the person you love the most, you can’t help but be hysterically nervous. In the end, that person’s opinion is the only one that you really care about. Interestingly, the manuscript opened up all kinds of new lines of communication between us. Before we knew it, we were broaching subjects that we had only hinted about before and talking about things we both wanted but had never mentioned before. Yummy.
On its own, The Present rapidly grew out of control, becoming a complete novel before I knew it was actually happening. When I thought it was in the best shape it was ever going to be, I asked my wife who she thought I should submit it to. She didn’t hesitate for a moment. She wanted it to go to the home of her favorite authors, Ellora’s Cave. Since she has read more erotic romance than anyone I have ever met, I felt it was in my best interest to go with her suggestion. Besides, I didn’t want to sleep on the couch.